“But I always think that the best way to know God is to love many things.”
~ Vincent van Gogh

Tuesday, August 16, 2016

Small Cat

compacting yourself
against morning cold

gazing at the window behind us
its garden reflections

yesterday was early Spring this reversal jars
yet you choose to keep me company

let us go inside leaving the garden 
to dream a while longer of warmth to come




















#awakeaugust day 16

Also written for dVerse Quadrille #14: jar

(A quadrille is exactly 44 words, excluding title. I also wanted to experiment with unpunctuated couplets.)


21 comments:

  1. I like your lack of punctuation here, Rosemary, giving it a free-flow of thought, perhaps just exactly like a cat would think. :) I am craving your cold morning. It's ridiculously hot here, even ridiculously early.

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  2. I like the structure of this piece - the short lines flow like thoughts in one's mind. Perhaps even a cat as De said above. Well written. It's been hot here in NJ as well, thought I'm not complaining. I rather be hot than cold.

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  3. Cute -- dreaming of the warm to come. How nice.

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  4. I like how the cat features in this poem. They seem so separate from this jarring world.

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  5. I think you do have some warmth already in that shared moment.

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  6. Lovely! One of the most peaceful calm things to see: a cat curled up in the sun. :)

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  7. Love the intensity of longing here in this poem.. oh to feel the warmth of summer again :D beautiful! ❤


    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  8. I love this, you and the cat dreaming of future warmth. It is 107F here today. I'd gladly trade with you if only you would let me rub Selene. I miss my cat. Such moments are so precious.

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    1. It would be whether Selene would let you! But she is much more at ease with new people now.

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  9. I could feel the warmth in your words, not only of weather but of friendship with a sweet kitty.

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  10. I like the image of the garden dreaming of warmth

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    1. Well done! The lack of punctuation left it a bit ambiguous as to who/what was doing the dreaming, but I did mean the garden. :)

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  11. Awwee how adorable this is. <3

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  12. Love! conspiring not to wake the garden ...

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  13. Gayle Walters RoseAugust 18, 2016 at 3:20 AM

    I like how you put your poem into couplets...each one telling a bit more of the story. I also like that Selene chose to stay in the garden in spite of the coolness and that the garden was left to dream of warmth to come...sweet.

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  14. No friend quite like a cat, is there?

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  15. Ah yes, the change in weather can definitely be 'jarring.' For both human AND cat!

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  16. Wonderfully presented, Rosemary. I wish you warmth!

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